Time for another Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Every Sunday, I join a bunch of writers through a blog hop and post an 8-10 sentence snippet of my current project. You can click on the link to see what everyone else is up to.
Here’s a change of scene: Lotte’s had some time of safety with her family, but she’s not really safe when she’s alone. In this scene, she’s at the grocery store when Christoph decides to pay her a visit.
I turned around, and my guess was spot on: Christoph. It looked like he hadn’t gotten a haircut since, and he gave me such a look of arrogance that it made me scowl. Even in the lazy summertime, he’s still wearing highly fashionable garbage and wasn’t breaking a sweat. His grin blossomed as he read the loathing stare on my face.
“I didn’t expect to ever see that look on your pretty little face,” he murmured, grinning. “It’s so unbecoming.”
I seethed; I had a thousand things I wanted to say or call him, but all I could feel the inkiness in me gurgling at boiling point.
“Get out of here,” I finally blurted hoarsely, hoping that wherever my brothers were, they would understand my rashness. He chuckled as he disappeared and then reappeared to my left; he was playing with me.
“You should be more careful with your words, Lotte,” he chided, “they’re potent, you know.”
Ugh, bullies with magic are the worst. Until next time, check out other snippets here. You can also learn more about the novel, Speechless, here. Don’t forget to comment below if you’ve got a snippet to share as well! Compliments and constructive insight are equally welcome.
12 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 56”
Interesting snippet, quite descriptive. “The inkiness in me” injected almost a humorous note, or thoughts of octopi, not sure that’s what you had in mind? YMMV.
Oh, maybe that hasn’t been explained in past snippets, but she gets an inky taste in her mouth ever since the curse is put on her–just something extra Christoph throws in. So she often describes that in relation to how she’s feeling or if something “magical” is about to happen. It’s hard to remember which details are here on WeWriWa and which ones I haven’t shared yet. 😉
He sounds super-annoying, and not just because he’s fashionable and sweat-free in summer-time. Great snippet!
Thank you! It’s nice to know when you can nail that annoying character down on the page.
I kind of get the impression she’s mad at him. 😉
BTW, I forgot to add my snippet to the WeWriWa list, but it’s up and eager for readers.
I’ll take a gander at your submission. Thanks for reading!
Oh, he’s so annoying! You conveyed that perfectly! Great snippet!
*evil grin* I have lots of inspiration from real life! haha. Thanks for reading and commenting!
You can definitely sense the tension between them, though I would think twice before messing with her. 😉
Yeah, she’s about up to HERE with his shenanigans. 😉
Loathsome, definitely comes to mind when Christoph is around!
Nice bad guy, very easy to totally dislike 😉
Thanks! I’m always in the market for bad-guy feedback. My goal is to make him loathsome without being cheesy or 2-D. 🙂