Time for another Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Every Sunday, I join a bunch of writers through a blog hop and post an 8-10 sentence snippet of my current project. You can click on the link to see what everyone else is up to.
At this point of the novel, Althod has been living the high life in King Seth’s castle and using his abilities to meddle with the king and his mind. It isn’t until Princess Karachi is threatened and taken by Ladala’s soldiers that the king snaps out of it. If only he had done so sooner.
“You forget, Your Majesty,” Althod began, “what would happen to you if you simply order me and my men away.”
“I cannot allow you and your men gallivanting through my castle as though it were yours, to threaten my sister of all people.”
“If you had let me do my job she wouldn’t have be taken hostage on accounts of treason, my liege,” the man pressed with edge in his voice.
“You have trod on my authority for far too long—I will find my sister with my own soldiers!” the King Seth thundered. “You can ship out.”
His last syllables reverberated along the walls of his throne room and disappeared into a chilling silence. Althod’s face hardly gave a flicker of emotion as he took a step forward. Two guards blocked his path towards the king, but Althod flicked his fingers and his conjured spell sent their bodies hurtling to opposite ends of the hall.
“I refuse to let you control my mind any longer,” he said through gritted teeth as he rose from his throne in fury.
“Your mind is no longer of value,” Althod returned, his gaze cold.
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13 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 36”
Oh boy! I like that he is standing up for himself and no longer allowing his mind to be controlled. Great tension!
Ooh, so chilling! I love a good bad guy. 🙂 Thanks so much for sharing!
Thank you for your words! 🙂
Spooky there at the end, great spot to end the excerpt! If I may, you’ve got a tiny typo: “she wouldn’t have be taken hostage” should be “she wouldn’t have been.” I skipped it on my first read-through. Anxious to see what happens next!
Thank you for the heads up, Marcia. I’ll make sure it’s changed in the post and in the manuscript. Can’t be leaving simple typos lying around. 😉
Uh oh, I have a feeling things are going to get pretty disastrous now! Very intense snippet…
Uh-oh. He may have broken free, but can he repel this invader? Signs point to no…
This snippet was proceeding in an interesting direction — and then at the end, you suddenly changed direction completely.
Wow–this is a great scene, Wit. Drew me right in–and now I have a lot of questions. I’d definitely read more!
Thanks, Teresa! I think I’ll keep leaving villain snippets behind because I could always use a second opinion on how they’re doing.
Oh – this doesn’t sound good for the king. I hope he has extra resources.
WOW. That was intense! I absolutely loved the tension between the characters, and the blame they threw at each other. Great snippet! I loved it!!!
I appreciate your words! Thanks for leaving great comments all the time. It does the heart good. 🙂