Time for another Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Every Sunday, I join a bunch of writers through a blog hop and post an 8-10 sentence snippet of my current project. You can click on the link to see what everyone else is up to.
To provide a bit of background on this one, imagine flying on a dragon for the first time, and you’ve crash-landed in the woods during a storm. Yup, Ilsi’s having a bit of a rough time. In her search for shelter during the night and in the rain, she miraculously finds a cottage. I like fairytales, so there’s gotta be a cottage every so chapters.
“Is there someone out there? Gracious, it’s been a while since I’ve heard such a rude knock.” A wrinkly, old woman supported by a walking stick opened the door, holding a candlestick in her other hand. The flame shone on Ilsi’s shivering face.
“Let me in now, I beg you!” Ilsi said through gulps of desperate air. The old woman’s eyes suddenly widened and motioned with her free hand for someone to hurry to the door.
“Hurry, Gilly! I think she’s—”
Think she’s what? Think she’s what? I like that chapter break. Check out other snippets here. And comment below if you’ve got a snippet to share as well!
7 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 24”
I agree — that chapter break is guaranteed to force readers to continue on to the next page!
I think she’s going to faint.
Yeah, what is she? What’s she running from? And, is it still on her trail?
Good questions! It’s hard to fit everything in a snippet sometimes and provide enough context. But to better explain, here’s a summary of the novel: http://witandtravesty.com/our-novels/destiny-seeker/
Love your comment about how there have to be cottages in fairy tales – that MUST be a rule LOL. Excellent excerpt and I’m totally in suspense for the answer to what the old lady was going to say next. Well done!
Fantastic chapter break. The scene is so full of tension! Outstanding job of grabbing the reader’s attention, Wit!
Just a thought–when I read this: “The old woman’s eyes suddenly widened and motioned with her free hand for someone to hurry to the door.” I’d put a comma after “widened” and then add the word “she” after “and”. That keeps it from appearing that her eyes widened and motioned with her free hand. Agreement–her eyes can’t motion with her hand…
I do that all the time. 🙂 Sometimes my body parts are doing things that only other body parts can do. 🙂
Oh man, those dangling modifiers though. Thanks for pointing that out–I appreciate it! 🙂