Time for another Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Every Sunday, I join a bunch of writers through a blog hop and post an 8-sentence snippet of my current project. You can click on the link to see what everyone else is up to.
Villains are fun, right? I think any way a character introduces themselves is super telling of their nature and how they view themselves. What can you learn from Reubens (a high-ranking Yildirim) just by these sentences? No, I’m actually curious because villains are hard to not muck up.
He quickly unsheathed a long knife and it glinted devilishly in the moonlight. He held it close to her face so she could feel its coldness against her cheek.
“Why not use your abilities to confirm what I already know?”
Ilsi whimpered, only to throw him off while she tried to think. She made pithy pleas for her life and he just kicked her in the stomach to get her to stop. She wheezed a bit and it wasn’t theatrical in the least.
“I met your father, but didn’t find your mother,” the cloaked man said. “Was she dead before we met?”
Doesn’t he know that it’s not wise to make jokes about moms? It’s how you get in trouble! Just after this, Ilsi is pretty pissed—because he knowingly gives away that he was partially responsible for a raid on her clan. Get ready to get some, Yildirim scum!
Ugh, this was so hard to limit to only eight sentences. There was a few bits before, after, and in between I wish you could see. But this is the raw introduction to Reubens, who we met partially in the last snippet. Check out other snippets here. And comment below if you’ve got a snippet to share as well!
4 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 21”
He’s a nasty villain for sure, but not smart enough to refrains from trying too hard to hurt.
Okay, this fellow sounds extremely unpleasant! But I’ll bet he’s fun to write. Hope Ilsi finds a way to get away from him.
ooh he does sound nasty, but then he’s supposed to. Villains *are* fun to write, for me anyway. I wonder what made this one into a bad guy? I get very interested in motives and back story.
You know we do allow ten sentences nowadays 🙂 Intense snippet, like the way she keeps her head and tries to buy time.